This is my first attempt at Kellie Ellmore’s Free Write Friday exercise.
Anything could happen.
No editing.
Here goes …
It was a dark and stormy night. So I made chicken soup. Warm. Comforting. Soothinng. The sting of the darkness tempered by the comforts of broth. Easing my mind. Consoling my body. A flash of lightning. A burst of rain. Then falling down my window pane. Torrential, as the soup floods my rumbling stomach the waters soak the dry earth. Refreshed; revitalized; repaired. Another crash of thunder and my black cat stretches and yawns. Such a bore, the storm, he purrs. He seeks out his fluffy mouse and bats it mercilessly across the tile floor. A flash illuminates. The mouse is launched. The cat lunges. I laugh. The storm a backdrop, not a player. A game changer? A wake-up call? Isn’t that what the storms of life teach us? Get our attention? Wake-up! Wake-up lest you drown in a flood of your own tears …
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Thanks for your indulgence …
Dorothy 🙂
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Copyright Aimwell CreativeWorks 2013
Welcome, Dorothy! So happy to have you joining us! And might I add, I felt a little like ‘Dorothy’ last night. lol 🙂
I love how your piece forced me to read it slowly. Like I was sitting in your quiet kitchen, listening to the storm and sipping soup. Great dramatics to it, subtly. Love that.
Thank you for writing for me and I hope you will do so again soon.
Best,
♥ Kellie
Hey, my pleasure. And thank you for your feedback. … Glad, like “Dorothy” you were able to endure the storm last night. I will be back to participate in FWF again. … Be well, Dorothy 🙂
Very nice, I hope you continue to post on the FWF prompt. It is always nice to find others to read.. Thank you.
Thank you for stopping by and for your encouragement. … Be well, Dorothy 😉
I really like this!
Thank you. 🙂
Enjoyed reading your writing, easy to imagine being there – powerful endline & so true.
Appreciate your feedback. Thanks for visiting. 🙂
Liked your internal rhymes.
Thanks. They just kind of showed up … 😉
This is just what I like about prompts. You don’t have to write the most obvious thing!!! I really like this. I especially like the line “as the soup floods my rumbling stomach the water soaks the dry earth”. Fantastically interesting and active verbs. Well done.
So glad you like my contribution.Words are wonderful puzzle pieces. Amazing how they all fit together, sometimes in the most surprising, and satisfying, ways. 😉
Love the last line. Very true. 🙂
Thanks, Suzanne. I had to wake up. I know it’s true 😉 … Be well, Dorothy 🙂
Well done, Dorothy! Very vivid, with a great message!
I’ve been hanging around FWF for quite a while, and I’m a huge Kellie Elmore fan. Happy to see so many new faces these last several weeks!
Here’s my entry: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2013/04/13/like-a-rainbow-in-the-dark/
Thank you for visiting and leaving a comment. It means a lot. Be well, Dorothy 🙂
Love the run of actions, the places it goes inside of the head… Poetry with effects, that affect.
Thanks, Sean. … Yes, I like when the words just topple out of my head and onto the page like that. … Thanks for visiting and leaving a comment. … Be well, Dorothy 🙂